Crossover Catastrophe- The Secret of Queen Annalese

Hello, and welcome back to Fanfic Masochism.

Ah, the crossover. I’m rather fond of crossovers, because that’s where I got my start when writing my own fanfiction. Of all the genres of fanfiction out there, the crossover is probably the hardest to pull off. Not only do you have to know the ins and outs of one universe, but you also have to know the ins and outs of multiple universes. What kind of powers would an Imperial psyker have in Middle Earth or Equestria (believe me, that last one has happened)? Would Godzilla trash the heroes and villains of Neon Genesis Evangelion? Star Trek vs. Star Wars (My question is why not have both)?

My point is, a crossover needs a lot more attention than a normal story; all aspects of the various canons need to be properly balanced, and all the characters need to be properly represented and still feel like their canon selves.

So, what do you get when you cross Teen Titans, Avatar: The Last Airbender, Percy Jackson, and How To Train Your Dragon together? A cluttered mess of a fic also known as The Secret of Queen Annalese by Rosealyn ‘Flinx’ Roth.

Spoilers ahoy!

The fic opens with a note that this is from Beast Boy’s perspective. Helpful, but it could have been done much better… like, you know, not telling us and showing that it’s Beast Boy speaking. Hopefully this doesn’t end up like Legend of Skye Dumbass or Healing (shudders). Anyway, Beast Boy narrates that Robin has called a meeting of all the Titans groups; North, South, East, West, and so on.

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Last time I checked, the Titans only had East and West groups. Someone correct me if I’m wrong.

So, we’ve got everyone here: Robin, Cyborg, Beast Boy, Raven, Starfire, Kid Flash, Speedy, Jinx, Terra, Cheshire-

Jinx, I can understand; she did actually have a Heel-Face Turn on the show. But Terra and Cheshire? Last time I checked, Terra ended the series depowered and just wanting a normal life without superheroics making things complicated, and Cheshire was still the crazy Vietnamese assassin we all know and love. If this were the comics universe I’d be scratching my head more, since the first incrarnation of Terra (who I believe was the inspiration for the animated Terra) was a psycho even Deathstroke was scared of and Cheshire nuked a country as part of her job (or because she’s as much a loon as the other supervillains). Granted, Cheshire being redeemed through her love for Roy Harper has worked before (*cough*Young Justice*cough*), you can’t just spring it on us that quickly.

Although… considering she’s with Speedy, does that mean Lian Harper is canon?

Whatever, all the Titans are called together, and after we get a brief rundown of the couples in the group (with special note that Beast Boy has gotten over Terra since her memories came back) Robin explains the mission: he got a call from a queen (guessing the title Queen Annalese), saying that she’s being pursued by fantastical monsters and needs the Titans’ help. Beast Boy makes a crack about unicorns and Jinx blows up his chair for his troubles, causing all the Titans to laugh at his misfortune. Even Raven chuckles a little.

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Well, it is Beast Boy. Raven does tend to laugh when things go wrong for him.

So, what is the queen being hunted by?

“By vampires.”

Vampires. Really? That’s the problem that requires over four super teams to deal with? While proper, non-Twilight vampires are awesome, they are fairly low on the totem pole when it comes to superhuman threats. Almost every major hero (and quite a few minor ones) have beaten vampires at one point or another (Supergirl and Batgirl/Stephanie Brown took out an entire mob of Dracula clones once), so they aren’t usually considered a threat when compared to the diabolical masterminds and galactic conquerors superheroes usually go up against. I mean, unless the entire Von Carstein family, their retainers, and all of their undead armies are after this queen, I don’t see a reason why the Titans need to call in reinforcements.

Robin goes on to say that the Queen will be here in the morning, and after all the heroes agree to defend her to the best of their abilities Robin says that, just to be sure, the queen suggested he call in some help from a few other groups, mainly Team Avatar and the heroes of Camp Halfblood.

Um… So the Justice League doesn’t exist in this universe? Are they busy fighting Darkseid or someone else, and thus can’t spare at least a few members to help?

Ignoring that fact for a moment, how would the queen know about these alternate dimension heroes and how to contact them? Maybe it has something to do with her secret, but a little explanation would be nice.

So, the other teams show up, and…

… Their introductions amount to “Hello, my name is X, and I can do this.” And they sound all official too. It works for some characters… for others:

“I am a bender. I can earthbend, though I am blind. I can feel the vibrations in the earth allowing me to pinpoint where everyone and everything is”- Toph Bei Fong.

… Not so much. Compare that to Toph’s original introduction, where she talks smack with the Boulder before clobbering him in Earth Rumber VI. That scene helped set up Toph’s powers and her personality, but this scene only goes half way. I want to see Toph be snarky, please; heck, even Ember Island Player Toph did this intro better.

Oh, and also the entire Greek Pantheon gets called in from the Percy Jackson universe, not to mention the demigod heroes themselves. Do you really need GODS to take out a couple of vampires? Screw the Von Carsteins, Nagash must be invading the realm if you call in an entire Pantheon just to protect one queen.

Oh, and Beast Boy apparently is attracted to one of Aphrodite’s daughters, especially when she starts adjusting her appearance to look like Raven.

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Well, add another contender to the “quickest ships” contest. Beast Boy and Raven are right behind Jupiter and Kaldur, I believe.

Oh, and the author’s note says there more characters are forthcoming.

You’ve already got over THIRTY characters, and you just said you were going to have trouble keeping track of them. YOU DO NOT NEED MORE CHARACTERS! YOU DIDN’T EVEN NEED MOST OF THESE CHARACTERS!

Seriously, the core team would have been more than adequate in dealing with a vampire problem: you’ve got a half-demon sorceress, a super strong alien who can fire energy blasts from her eyes and hands, a kid who can shapeshift into any animal, a cyborg loaded out with advanced weaponry, and Batman’s protégé. They should send your vampires running for Transylvania without breaking a sweat.

Even if you wanted to do a crossover, you still don’t need many characters: Rosealyn ‘Flinx’ Roth brought in not only the main members of Team Avatar, but also Ozai’s Angels (Azula, Mai, and Ty Lee). And then you have Percy and his friends being joined by the Greek Gods, and all the other members of the Titans, most of which I don’t really know much about. All you really need for this is the core of Team Avatar (Aang, Katara, Sokka, Toph, Zuko, and Suki) and the main heroes of the Percy Jackson series teaming up with the original five Titans, and this story would have been fine. If you have too many characters in the story, it becomes cluttered and you have a hard time keeping all of them straight and, more importantly, developing them sufficiently. Some writers are good at this (Tolkien, George R.R. Martin), but their stories are usually longer than 20,000 words.

No, that’s not just a number I pulled out of a hat. This story is 20,136 words long, split up over sixteen chapters.

There are other problems about bringing in these particular characters that I won’t get into right away, because now we get a scene from Raven’s POV.

At least the author was nice enough to tell us when the POV shifted.

Anyway, the next day Raven wakes up and gives a mental rundown of the events the next day. She thinks all the new people are nice (she bonds with Mai, no surprise there), and even Azula is personable, which is explained in an author’s note immediately following the sentence-

Never, and I mean never, put author’s notes in the story proper. That completely kills the momentum of the story, and it damages your ability of actually showing us the changes in this universe.

And while Azula being nice is not a bad plotline, it works so much better if you SHOW US THIS! Don’t just say “Oh, she’s good in this universe” and then do nothing to elaborate on it. Do you expect me to forget this:

Or this:

Or this:

  Just because you said “Oh, that didn’t happen”? It didn’t work in Avatars II, I don’t think it’ll work here.

So, Raven goes downstairs and sees that everyone is up and about. She immediately goes back to her room, although I think the author meant for her to walk into the room instead of “walked back into my room”.

“You can use the bathroom and shower if you need to.” I informed them. “I’m going down to the living room/ kitchen” (A/N: I don’t know what to call it)

Translation: I’m such a shitty writer I can’t even choose what to call a kitchen.

So Raven goes to the living room/ kitchen (is it really so hard to choose between the two?) to make some tea… a woman out of my own heart. However, Beast Boy already made her tea, and Raven… is surprisingly happy. She even gets an exclamation point after one of her sentences. Now, I’m not saying that Raven can’t be happy, it’s just that usually she’s so dry and monotone that happiness isn’t one of those emotions she shows off very often, and even then not as vocally as shown here.

Anyway, Raven takes her tea out and runs into Aphrodite, who explains the other gods departed with their children for a little bit.

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So much for swearing to defend this queen.

Raven and Aphrodite talk for a little, with Aphrodite saying she likes the Tower because of all the love going around. Raven takes some time to mull over her relationship with Beast Boy, which Aphrodite catches on to and teases Raven about.

And this romance plot feels like I’m getting hit by a brick… pretty sure I used that joke before. And do we need the teasing bit? That was old back in Legend of Skye Dumbass.

But we’re interrupted by the arrival of the queen! Robin informs the others that the queen is very old fashioned… as in “still travels by horse and carriage” old fashioned.

Um… Okay? How the hell did she get in touch with Robin and the Titans, smoke signals? Courier pigeon?

“Wow, you weren’t kidding when you said old fashion, were you, Robin.” Azula said.

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YOU’RE ONE TO TALK TO, PSYCHO PRINCESS WHO TRAVELS BY PALANQUIN HALF THE TIME!

The carriage stops and the queen’s servants get out. They’re all dressed in 18^th century style clothing, but there’s little description of just WHAT that looks like. So, I imagine they look like this:

Our Queen's Servant, Ladies and Gentlemen!

So the queen proper steps out of her carriage. Instead of getting a description of what she looks like, we’re told in another INTERRUPTING AUTHOR’S NOTE to go to the author’s profile and look at a drawing there… Yeah, because that’s not going to distract me. Raven notes that the queen is very beautiful, in dress and body.

Why would Raven be commenting on clothes? Isn’t that more Starfire or Ty Lee’s thing?

There’s also something off about her eyes.

Unusual eye color is a major warning sign for Sues.

So, this is Queen Annalese, our human MacGuffin for the remainder of this fic. And it turns out the two girls are Astrid and Ruffnut from How to Train Your Dragon, and they’re Annalese’s servants/ besties.

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WERE THEY REALLY NEEDED FOR THIS?! WE ALREADY HAVE ENOUGH CHARACTERS, WE DON’T NEED MORE! AND WHY WOULD A QUEEN HAVE A PAIR OF DARK AGE ERA VIKINGS ACTING AS HER SERVANTS! WHY ARE THEY EVEN ACTING AS SERVANTS? AND WHERE ARE THEIR DRAGONS!? AND WHERE’S TUFFNUT?! RUFFNUT NEVER GOES ANYWHERE WITHOUT TUFFNUT!

Just when I thought this fic couldn’t get any worse.

We then cut to Katara’s POV… I thought this was about Beast Boy and Raven? I like you, Katara, but I really don’t want to see what you have to say.

DON’T CRY! I STILL THINK YOU’RE AWESOME!

Anyway, Katara’s narration opens with her commenting how beautiful the queen is… Honestly, I think Katara is a billion times hotter than Annalese, but that’s just me. The queen said that they had a pleasant journey, although they were sort of attacked on the way in but her fiancé Adrian managed to lose the bad guys soon enough.

If he’s so awesome, why do you even need all the other heroes?

Logic: Because then she’d have to publish the story legitimately?

SHUT UP!

So, it also turns out that the queen and her fiancé didn’t want to wait for the honeymoon and already have a baby, the ridiculously beautiful Julietta.

First off, I don’t usually approve of unmarried couples having babies, especially since these two are teens (confirmed when Katara said that Annalese is the same age as her and the heroes). Second off, obviously the two had enough time to screw each other, so the vampire thing must not be very important. Thirdly, WHY IS EVERYONE FAWNING OVER A BABY WHEN THEY SHOULD BE DEALING WITH THE VAMPIRE THREAT! I’m just going to rename Julietta Black Hole, and then everything will be better.

Annalese asks if Black Hole will be any trouble. Jinx says no, and she can stay in her, Terra and Cheshire’s room (because a reality warper who causes bad luck, a turncoat, and a psychotic assassin are the perfect nannies!)

Katara offers to help move stuff in… and she gets into a conversation with Ruffnut and Astrid about what it’s like serving under the “beautiful and caring Queen Annalese” (grabs mouthwash).

“It’s fun. She’s extremely nice, unlike many other royals and queens that are stuck up and treat you like s**t. She doesn’t treat us like slaves at all.”

Cutting the line short, because it’s just the two of them boasting about how awesome and wonderful Queen Annalese is.

Like you wouldn’t believe.

Also, Astrid and Ruffnut are BADASS VIKING WARRIORS! THEY WOULDN’T TAKE SHIT FROM ANYONE!

Speaking of, why is shit censored when later ass is not? Just go all the way and write it as it should be, or if you’re so uneasy about showing it just cut it completely.

They also explain that the vampires want to kill the royal family, but not why. That’s the queen’s business, her secret…

DON’T TELL ME YOU’RE GOING TO BE JOINING KALANI AND JUPITER IN THE “I’M NOT GOING TO TELL ANYONE ABOUT MY PROBLEMS” CLUB!

Afterwards, Katara hangs around and comments that Queen Annalese is more beautiful than her- WOULD YOU JUST STOP IT!!! KATARA IS MUCH MORE BEAUTIFUL THAN THIS PASTY WHITE BIMBO!!!

Katara turns to leave, but Annalese asks her to help Astrid and Ruffnut undress her.

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They do so, and Katara’s all amazed at the intricacy of it all… okay, fair enough, she was raised in a small backwater tribe. She still notes that Annalese is pretty and all…

Kinda creepy there, Katara.

GAH!

Anyway, next scene is from Thalia’s POV… the one from Percy Jackson, not Bruce Wayne’s babymomma (who will always be inferior to Selina Kyle. See, I can ship too).

And do we really need to shift POVs so much? Just stick with one viewpoint character, and the story will be much smoother.

Anyway, Starfire wakes her up for breakfast, although she seems a bit ditzier than usual. There’s ship-teasing between Thalia and Nico, and then more “Annalese and Black Hole are the greatest people in the world” fawning.

Shoot me.

After Annalese retrieves Black Hole, she announces that since she and Adrian have been engaged for two years (one of which was spent running from vampires and making babies), now’s the perfect time to have their wedding. Tomorrow, if it can be managed.

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WHY WOULD YOU THINK NOW IS A GOOD TIME TO HAVE A WEDDING?! YOU ARE BEING CHASED BY VAMPIRES WHO WANT TO KILL YOU AND YOUR FAMILY, YOU SHOULD DEAL WITH THEM FIRST BEFORE GETTING HITCHED! AND YOU CAN’T JUST SCRAPE A WEDDING TOGETHER IN ONE DAY… okay, you probably could, but it wouldn’t be a very fancy one.

We then cut to Terra’s POV- OH MY GOD WOULD YOU JUST STOP IT! STOP CHANGING CHARACTERS EVERY CHAPTER! THIS ISN’T GAME OF THRONES! I would have found it more bearable if they were actually well developed characters, but NO ONE has any discernible personality or anything resembling their canon selves; Raven’s not deadpan, Beast Boy isn’t fun loving, Azula is not diabolical, Katara’s not headstrong, so on and so forth. THESE ARE NOT THE CHARACTERS THAT I KNOW AND LOVE, THESE ARE JUST CARDBOARD CUTOUTS OF THOSE CHARACTERS.

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I’m less than hallway through this shit.

So, wedding planning happens. It’s all shopping and buying food and decorations, wedge between “Annalese is so beautiful and awesome” moments. Azula even comments on how cool it is to be part of a queen’s wedding.

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Let me repeat that, AZULA is commenting on how cool it is to be at a queen’s wedding.

You know, Azula. PRINCESS Azula. Sociopathic nutcase Azula. The girl who flat out murdered one of the most powerful characters in the Avatar franchise (he got better). The girl who overthrew an entire nation in three days, at the age of fourteen. The girl whose idea of flirting is to comment how her target’s outfit could result in the deaths of hundreds of sailors. The girl who said that trust and understanding is for weaklings, and only through fear can she get anything resembling respect.

Long story short, AZULA WOULD NOT GIVE A DAMN ABOUT SOME QUEEN’S WEDDING! YOU HAVE DERAILED AZULA’S CHARACTER SO MUCH THAT I’M NOT EVEN SURE SHE’S THE REAL AZULA!!

So, they get everything ready, and everyone goes to bed to rest for tomorrow. We then get an entire chapter dedicated to the author saying she’s not going to continue the story unless more people review it.

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… No. Lesson for new writers out there, NEVER hold your story hostage for more reviews. It makes you look like a whiney attention whore, and it really defeats the purpose of writing. You should be writing because it’s fun, because you have a wonderful story that needs to be told, not because you want everyone to bow down to you and say how awesome you are. If you think that not enough people are reviewing your work, update more and get your name out. Even better, ask those that like the story to tell their friends or anyone else who might like it and let the story spread by word of mouth, but don’t demand that your readers give you love.

Miss Roth, you have made me dislike you even more than Dakari-King Mykan, because at least he didn’t demand that we love him… he told us all that we were idiots that wouldn’t know a good story when we saw one, but he didn’t demand that we love him.



The next chapter is another author’s note saying that she’s continuing on, but doesn’t know how to write weddings.

I don’t either, which is why I tend to avoid them.

Next chapter is from Jinx’ POV-

Moving on…

They get ready for the wedding, and the story continues to be peppered with Author’s Notes and “Oh, Annalese is so awesome” moments… now that I look at it, Annalese kind of acts like a bitch throughout this entire story. She’s always making demands and telling the heroes what to do like they’re all their servants, nevermind that half of them could probably kill her without breaking a sweat. I know she’s a guest and all, but the characters are not her slaves.

Or at the very least, shouldn’t be.

So they all get ready, and the scene cuts to Raven’s POV HALFWAY THROUGH THE CHAPTER! AND SHE SPENDS HER SCENE GAWKING OVER HOW BEAUTIFUL SHE LOOKS IN HER BRIDESMAID DRESS!

I’m reaching the point where I want Nagash to come out of Warhammer Fantasy and devour this Sue’s soul. THAT, at least, would be IN CHARACTER!

Half of this chapter is them getting their hair and clothes ready. Pass.

The other half is the actual wedding. Do we see that? Nope, because it’s not like I wanted to see any real SUBSTANCE in this story. No, I wanted to see a Mary Sue get married while everyone else is a brain-dead idiot with no personality beyond “Ooh, Annalese is so pretty and wonderful!”

Actually, forget calling Julietta Black Hole. Annalese is now Black Hole.

Black Hole and her boy toy get married. Now everyone has to go celebrate instead of worrying about the FREAKING VAMPIRES! OR DID YOU FORGET THAT THERE ARE VAMPIRES AFTER BLACK HOLE AND HER PRECIOUS BABY! THAT KIND OF SEEMS LIKE AN IMPORTANT PLOT POINT!

The next chapter is the reception. We open with Azula’s POV, and of course she’s OOC to the point that I’m just going to refer to her as Beth (apologies to any readers out there actually named Beth). Beth is having a great time before we cut to Kid Flash’ POV, and he confesses his love for Jinx, followed by some guy name Kole and Raven and-

STOP! STOP! JUST STOP! STOP THIS RIGHT NOW! YOU CAN’T JUST CHANGE POVS LIKE THAT! YOU CAN’T JUST HAVE A BUNCH OF “LOVE CONFESSIONS” FOR CHARACTERS THAT HAVE BARELY INTERACTED WITH ONE ANOTHER! YOU CAN’T JUST SAY “OH, THESE CHARACTERS ARE SO IN LOVE WITH ONE ANOTHER” AND NOT ACTUALLY SHOW US ANY EVIDENCE THAT THIS IS FACT!

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Thank God it’s almost over.

The next chapter is called “Trouble and Secrets Revealed”. So we’re finally getting back to the original plot? YES!

For whatever reason, Dr. Light, HIVE and Mumbo decide to attack the city, calling the Titans away. No problem, you’ve still got 20+ heroes and GODS to defend Black Hole. Of course, we don’t see any of the fight, and what we do see is that the vampires arrive, take out several heroes, and kidnap baby Julietta.

The heroes rush in to help, but Black Hole tells them to back off or else they’ll all get killed.

Lady, these people have fought against GODS and won, and you’re telling them to back off from fighting a couple of vampires?

Duing this time we are introduced to Daemon (I guess it’s pronounced like Matt Damon instead of demon, since daemon is the British spelling of demon), and he proceeds to taunt Black Hole about her past a little. In the meantime, Black Hole demands that Daemon let her friends go.

However, he’s an idiot and does so, but refuses to let Baby Black Hole go. He taunts Black Hole again and it turns out…

Daemon’s her brother, and she’s the Vampire Queen.

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… Ha.

Ha ha ha. Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha. HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA!

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Seriously, though. That’s a pretty lame twist. I mean, it worked for Tarrlok and Amon because he didn’t know Amon was Noatak until he got Bloodbent (oops, spoilers), but here it just falls flat. Also, if you had TOLD US THIS earlier instead of waiting until NOW, then a whole lot of pain and misunderstanding could have been avoided… okay, the pain is mostly referring to me.

Her backstory is that when she was younger back in 1835, she was raped by a gang of thugs…

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Do I really need to repeat my rant concerning rape that I made back in my review of legolas by laura? Because I’ll give an abridged version; rape is a terrible experience, and I hate that writers like Rosealyn ‘Flinx’ Roth use it as cheap emotional drama that has no longlasting effect on the character. Furthermore, if Black Hole really is almost two hundred years old, she is not going to be acting like some stereotypical teenager; the body might not age, but the brain does (unless you’ve been in suspended animation for an extended period of time). She would most likely be a) cold and detatched or b) haughty and superior to everyone.

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Oh wait, I forgot to mention that Rosealyn ‘Flinx’ Roth is a Twilight fangirl to the Nth degree.

Yeah, call in the Exterminatus.

Black Hole’s story is enough to drive the Not Teen Titans and Not Team Avatar and Not halfbloods to tears, and she announces that she has a plan to get her daughter back.

She’ll sacrifice all of them to summon Nagash, the First Necromancer, and he’ll unite the armies of the undead and usher in the End Times No, that’d actually be cool. Her plan is to follow the vampires back to their lair and attack them there. They are also going to split up, with those that aren’t likely to become vampires to lead the charge while the others hang back and provide moral support.

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That’s your plan? I could have come up with that in my sleep. Now, a better plan would be one of the following:

You have gods on your side. Have them just march in and pulp Daemon’s pasty white ass.

A few heavy hitters make a distraction, then Toph and Aang do a surgical strike to steal Julietta from Daemon, and then drop their base on top of them.

Kid Flash runs in there and steals the kid. He doesn’t call himself the Fastest Man Alive for kicks.

A few heavy hitters make a distraction, while quicker characters like Robin and Ty Lee sneak in and steal the kid, and then Toph and Aang drop the base on their heads.

Call the Justice League. Superman’s powers are entirely solar based, so he’s walking Kryptonite to vampires Wait, Twilight vampires. They sparkle in the sunlight… Okay, call the Justice League, and have them beat the shit out of the vampires like proper superheroes.

Astrid and Ruffnut go back to Berk and get their dragons for a little vampire barbeque.

Let Azula talk to them for a few minutes. She’ll get your baby back and a loyal army of vampires to go with it.

Just having half your team sit on the sidelines severely hampers their effectiveness, and makes me wonder why you even included those characters in the first place.

So they go to find the bad guys, although they have to travel by low technological levels to avoid detection. Their destination? Transylvania… which I’ll note is in Europe, halfway around the world. It would take months for them to travel that far, even with superpowers (unless you’re Kid Flash, in which case you can probably get there in a few minutes at least).

Do we get to see the trip?

(A/N: I’m going to skip the part where they travel, we all know it took forever to get there. Very boring, nothing happened, people complained, couples and friends bonded, etc.)

“Nothing happened”? YOU JUST SAID THERE WAS CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT AND BONDING! YOU CAN’T JUST HIDE THAT OFFSCREEN!! AND WHO COMPLAINED?! IT SEEMED PRETTY DAMN UNANIMOUS THAT THEY WERE ONBOARD WITH THE IDEA OF SAVING YOUR LITTLE BRAT!

They arrive at Daemon’s evil lair, your stereotypical creepy castle. They take out the guards easy enough, which makes me wonder why they still need so many characters.

… Wait, I’ve been wondering that since Chapter 1.

They infiltrate the base and confront daemon, who plans to make Jinx his bride. Of course, things don’t work out for him and Black Hole kills him… which makes me question WHY SHE NEEDED PROTECTION IF SHE’S PERFECLTY CAPABLE OF KILLING THE BAD GUYS BY HERSELF.

They find Julietta and head back to Jump City. Everything is great, so the team decides to celebrate their victory.

I’m celebrating that I don’t have to read this again.

This story sucks. The plot is awful, the canon characters are OOC to the highest degree, and Annalese is such a Mary Sue that she creates her own gravity well of bad. Nothing is developed, from the relationships to Daemon’s role in the plot. He was so generic that I didn’t even bother reading into the full of his plan. It was most likely “Make Jinx my wife and take over the world”.

As far as a crossover, it sucks even more. None of the aspects of Avatar, Teen Titans, Percy Jackson, or How to Train Your Dragon are shown to their fullest, because everything is solved by Annalese before the other characters can get their chance to shine. It’s like I go to a movie theater expecting a superhero movie and accidentally walk into Breaking Dawn Part 2.

For those of you who want to write crossovers, try to make sure both universes have a chance to shine, so that the entire experience feels like I’m actually watching/reading something from those universes… This also includes fusion fics, which I’ll probably get to eventually.